October Girl

hey there, my name is Max aand just to say you drew me in at the first paragraph, and most people don''t do that your lucky, I think you could ...

oh I like this honestly, I really like this it's powerful orginal, I think it could use a better title though like something below Together For Never Together Without You ...

I liked this ALOT, because it sort of reminded me of my pregnancy. Sweet, but maybe you should talk a little bit more about her figure and how it changes ...

I like it but at the same time I hate it, I'm not sure why, maybe because of your word choice? I don't exactly know but I think it's too ...

[quote="BumbleBear"]This is the first poem I'm posting, so please correct where you see necessary. [b]To Drown[/b] Sometimes life is a sea, deep, dark and black>>> This seems a little awkward ...

This is short so it's very easy to crit, I think it was ok, really disturbing but ok. I mean at least your not discribing how you hit your head ...

I wasn't exactly sure what point you were trying to get across but I liked the lyric/poem thingie alot. I felt like I could actually sing it, but with my ...

haha nice, I liked the title of the story because it drew me in, I like how you started off it was very strong and someone said earlier that it ...

[quote="dommy65"]Awww this was so cute! I love the little part about the cat, it was sweet. Sorry this review is pretty much pointless!! :) ~Dommy[/quote] lol same here I loved ...

Hello, Dear, I disagree with Darklady above me, I thought it was pointless but yet brilliant. I love it, I've been here for a while and I just wanted to ...

[quote="BlondeTwiggy"]If you remain a tiny rose Alone behind the log— A Tree, immense, denies the rain— You’re motionless in fog—>>I like this a perfect begging I swear! Despair you not: ...

This is really sad, and very emotional, I'm sorry for your loss, but this is a great story exactly what a person should feel like after losing someone. I would ...

sitting alone in my own despair in the lunch room of death watching people eat their souls as if it's their last meal wondering wondering whats driving them whats provokes ...

[quote="PenguinAttack"]I understand why - Your voice crackles on a dying line >>>This is akward, but I like it. and I wonder where your eyes are;>>>Um no offence PA but where ...

[quote="mydogbill"]I hope you never know, and never feel, what it is to be lost at sea. A hopeless journey, like a drifting log, lost to everyone, especially me. The tide ...